Stories In Letters: Why Do We Shiver At The Edge?
My dear,
Why do we shiver at the edge? Why do our limbs shake uncontrollably upon looking down from a great height?
I don't think at all that the reason is doubting stability of the muscles of our feet, or the weight of our heads in relation to our bodies, even if these are facts, we don't care about those facts in our normal steps, why do we care about them over heights?
I think freedom is the reason. You stand on the ledge and realize how free you are, you can finish everything with a simple cue, or take a slow step back. Either finish everything, or keep a balance of additional years, in which you complete a master's degree, and then devote yourself to putting your feet up at work, and other years for marriage, relationships, and millions of details.
The decision is at stake, and complete freedom is on the edge... Freedom is more glorious than resentment. Do you see?
Whenever I sit in our usual cafe I remember our conversation, which became extensive, and then turned into a challenge, I remember the look of your eyes for that moment, the narrow stares, the rapid movement of the pupils, and the confusion in your eyebrows.
"What are your motives for the adventure?", you asked. I said freedom.
The idea of being able to do that drives me crazy, sometimes to build and sometimes to destroy. I can travel, so why not? I can end a relationship, why not end it? Like the insistence of a salesman, the idea of possibility cries at me, and freedom plays right behind it to tease me.
You have always seen that what I say are just childish impulses and that adventure always calls for a rejection of the present.
I still remember our argument.. So in every adventure I take, I throw vengeance to the ground, and I remember you then say to myself: Freedom is enough, and I will succeed, though you doubt it.
One day I will have a great adventure, and I will tell you about it. And I will remember you with my bag on my back, with different tongues around me.
And I will tell you, my dear, that I have not hated a day that has passed, and I have not erased the pictures of those who passed by me, and that I did what I did for my childish impulses.
Like a child building a castle on the sand, only because he can, and then destroy it, for the same reason. And I promise I will build the most beautiful castle. And you will reconsider.
With love.
You use the resource of a letter to expose a story. That of someone brave enough to follow her desires in the use of her freedom. Thank you for writing this sensitive story for @theinkwell, @amirtheawesome1.
Thank you for your presence in the comments of your fellow writers.
Thank you, I was really worried that this form might not be accepted. But, I love exploring alternative storytelling tools and this was something I always wanted to explore.
Yes Freedom. That is what life is about
Exactly! thank you for reading.
This is brilliant, it is like a story written in poetic terms.
Good job mate 💯
Thank you for your kind comment.
I read this with the eyes of a much older person, someone who regards life mostly through the rear view mirror.
My response is subjective, not objective. I see an appetite to consume without leaving a trace. To consume for the purpose of consumption and nothing more
It seems the freedom claimed is not so free after all, but is tied to this one ambition, one desire:
As always @amirtheawesome1, an interesting read.
Whenever I see a subjective, I feel a weird satisfaction. I love writing stories that leave different impressions with different people with different experiences.
I love this format so much, and you use it masterfully here. There are so many lines that make you pause and think. 🙂
I will also hazard a guess that you are taking chances here. It feels like you are trying out new stuff and seeing what sticks. Like you're sneaker shopping but in story-from. 😁 I'd say your natural way with words lends itself to this style, and you should continue sharpening this specific skill. Those are just my 2 cents though. 😇
Freedom indeed. Cheers. 🍻
I always aim to try a new format every now and then. I get bored easily lol! Thank you for your nice comment.
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The juxtaposition of the child's sand castle and the author's desire to build a beautiful castle are striking. The child has a desire to create, destroy and repeat. All for fun. But the author is past the fun. The adventure must have a beautiful and permanent result. I think there is fear that the author worries the pursuit of an adventure may in the end be a regret of leaving a comfortable if mundane present. Also, here from @listnerds
It's overall the lack of a 100% conviction after taking a big step. I am glad this has left an impression on you enough to analyze it.
This is of great importance seeing that you are determined to go on your way and beliefs you can get whatsoever you want to achieve on your own, it is of great courage that you are able to say this and stand by it.
Great story 🥰
Yeah, essentially it's the courage for the first step. The rest might not be specific, but about learning comes later.
You are right
Wow, what a great story. It is beautifully written. Thank you so much for sharing.
Thank you, I am glad you liked it.
Great post as always, Amir.
Came here through #Listnerds.
I am glad you liked it, Eva.
Thank you for the comment.