RE: Bad with, worse without [WOTW]

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Hello,

I would like to give you my feedback.

You used the stylistic device "the moral of the story". Moral stories are perfect for conveying a message, which for me means: know what you are doing before you do it.

For me, however, it is possible, if I expand the framework in which your story takes place, that those who longed for their freedom can die in it, not necessarily a drama - reality is that one cannot always know what he does, unless he is doing it.

Your stylistic device of the exaggeration "all have died, without exception" invites exactly to it, if one transfers your tale to us people, to be able to think that just not all will die. Some will live and recognize their mistakes within their possibilities and learn from them. They will in turn have an influence on others and so on.

The simple language of the moral story is for me an invitation to expand it in its depths and actually not to stop at a one-to-one comparison.

I invite you to read my submitted story as well and let me know what you think. I'm eager to hear it. Perhaps, without reading the comments? :)

Greetings to you.



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Absolutely! I agree with your post of view.

My story was just to show one point. And not the whole issue involved. That's why in the end it says exactly what I meant "not always"

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Good thing is, I can search my mind for real life experiences, and I conclude that absolutes are rarely happening. For us humans it's impossible to step out of an existing system other than to be a true radical and drop out fully of society. Hermits or extreme survivalists serve us as interesting examples, even inspiring to change things without having to be extreme ourselves :)

The concerns of those who do not want to change anything about existing institutions or even vehemently oppose them and wage a campaign against critics or drop-outs are, in my opinion, exaggerated, sometimes even excessively so. They are afraid of something that is not a danger.

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