RE: The Kingdom of Bamboo

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Hi @newton666. Interesting story! It has a sense of stories retold from long ago.

One tip I thought I'd share with you is that your stories will be more readable if you add more punctuation. Each separate "idea" should be a complete sentence to ensure that we know when one idea ends and another begins. Here's an example of where you could end your sentences.

Current first paragraph (all one long sentence):

Toby was a cute young panda bear, which was raised by a herd of Bengal tigers, he even grew up with his sister a beautiful tigra named Lotus as the flower, but she was beautiful and strong, she taught him all about the tactics of marriage and defense, Toby was found on the bank of a river by a herd of tigers, but they were so small wrapped in a lot of bamboo leaves, and eventually became a teenager, he was well respected by his family of cats, all over the forest became known to this great panda raised among the tigers.

Recommended edit with periods added to separate the many ideas into separate sentences:

Toby was a cute young panda bear, who was raised by a herd of Bengal tigers. He even grew up with his sister, a beautiful tigra named Lotus as the flower. She was beautiful and strong, and she taught him all about the tactics of marriage and defense. Toby was found on the bank of a river by a herd of tigers. He was very small and wrapped in a lot of bamboo leaves, but he eventually became a teenager. He was well respected by his family of cats, and all over the forest he became known as this great panda raised among the tigers.

I hope that helps! We also have some great recommendations in the post, Help for the Grammatically Challenged, which is in our catalog of fiction writing tips. It describes how to use Google Docs to draft your content so it will point out errors, and then you can just click to fix them. It's a great tool!

Good luck and keep writing.



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thank you for the observation and I will take it to improve.

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