RE: The Gryphon

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Interesting direction you took with this one @iamraincrystal

I like how you show Erin has essentially abandoned his roots of where he came from, become a hardened warrior with less emotional connection. That would be every soldiers path I guess.

One of the final passages gives this impression clearly...

Stabbing the earth with the old shovel I held, I noticed how old man Remus slightly flinched away from me. "Erin.. This isn't you.." he softly said in the silence of the night as he wobbled on his cane.

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Exactly the lines that caught my attention!

"Erin.. This isn't you.." he softly said in the silence of the night as he wobbled on his cane.
"It's what I have become."

Powerful!

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