The Package - Part 4: A Daughter's Love - Weekend Freewrite (Single Prompt Option) - 12/14/19

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Weekend Freewrite -12/14/2019 - Single Prompt Option
The Package - Part 4: A Daughter's Love

Obtaining clearance to follow up on a clue about a possible lead in the case, Darnella caught the red eye headed toward Jarred and Justine.

She coordinated with her brother, Stefano, before she left so that he could stay with their mom. She now felt relieved about leaving with her in that fragile condition, and promised Stefano she'd call him when she arrived.

Once boarded, Darnelle looked blankly out the window staring across the clouds into nothingness. The hostess passed by, stirring her back to the present to answer the offer of complimentary items. She waived the hostess off and settled into her seat, then reached for her laptop.

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Darnella paused in the middle of recording her recent discoveries as she thought about how she came to be at this point in her life. Seems like forever since she even contemplated pursuing a serious relationship of her own. Yes, she and Jarred were engaged, but it was a long-distance relationship with him being in the service.

But she had no choice. She would protect her mom with her own life, no matter the cost or consequence. She thought of her mom now, lying in her hospital bed vulnerable as the day she reported the atrocities to the authorities.

Little did her mom know that the people involved named her as an accomplice. Unable to appear to defend herself, she was labeled as a conspirator and fugitive. She apparently changed her name, fled the country, and started a new life here.

Little did her mom also know that she had pursued her case for several years now. And it all started by accident when she was assigned the task of finding her brother's fiance a suitable keepsake in their attic for their wedding.

There, among her mom's treasures in an old suitcase, concealed in an unmarked envelope, was their Marriage Certificate. Darnella had seen her parents' Marriage Certificate before. She'd removed it numerous times from where it set atop their mantle in a beautiful gold frame.


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But on the back of this duplicate original, in her mom's handwriting, were the words "Marriage to Mattie Longarina." Consumed with her brother's wedding, she dismissed it at the time. Neither did she question her mom.

However, once she entered law enforcement and was assigned to a special task force, her life changed forever the day her superior left on her desk an authorization form for a special cold case file.

Thanks,
@justclickindiva

Happy rest of the week everyone with whatever your endeavors.


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Nice work!
I would recommend a little tidying of the chapters so that your writing is quick on the previews. That's why besides my image, the only thing before my chapter is the "Previously" thing to link back to the previous chapter. Everything else can go below so as to not distract from the writing.
Still great work.

I found you because @bengy featured you in the Pay it Forward Curation Contest. Keep up the great work!

Hi @viking-ventures. Thanks so very much for you visiting my series. I just don't know how to do as you suggested to link back so they aren't a distraction.

Do you have an example in a post so I can see how to do this?

Appreciate your taking the time to instruct me on how to make my post better.

Have a great day, and take care.

Here's my most recent chapter. Obviously, this is mostly just a style question, but I think having your writing as foremost is important.
https://steempeak.com/writing/@viking-ventures/pawn-of-the-nevi-chapter-29-a-mara-books

So, at the top, I put the image.
Then, I do [ previously... ](link of last chapter)
Then I go on to the chapter with # and ## for the chapter number and location.

So, where you have your chapter number and title, I'd use # or ## just before it (with a space) to bring attention to the chapter beginning.

Whereas with another type of article, I don't mind putting image credits with the image, in this case, I'd probably put them at the end, but again, that's just me.

I mostly want to give you another tool to play around with and see what you prefer.

Perfect. Let me take a look. Appreciate you taking the time with me. Have a great rest of your day. If I run into any other questions, I'll post it here. thanks.

Should I change this post, or leave as is? I don't know the rules for editing your posts after it's been 2 days.

Totally up to you. It used to be that you couldn't change it at all after 7 days, but you can change it indefinitely, I think. The only thing you can't do is delete it altogether.

I actually use Steempeak for almost everything on Steem because I can have templates for my posts - which means I can play there and see what it's doing, then just save it for future use. (If you haven't already tried it, it's really simple - replace "steemit" for "steempeak" - and use KeyChain to log in.)

I use Steempeak now for my series templates and others.

Ok, thanks so much.

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I'm impressed by the number of people that keep taking part in the free-writing prompts! I love how you've turned each prompt into an ongoing part of your multi part story!

I have featured you and this post for a Curation Contest here:

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This sure got really interesting @justclickindiva, and it appears I missed the previous part so I read that too to get the context, you are making the beginnings of a big and very exciting story here, and the false identities and hiding, while the daughter digs it all up is a great intrigue, thanks a lot for your hard work on this, it's awesome.


This post is AWESOME!

It has therefore got a manual 100% upvote from @thisisawesome, for the Awesome Daily Upvotes in category Freewrite, I give out 1 such vote in that category per day, plus 3 more in other categories, and your post will also be featured in todays Awesome Daily report for more visibility.

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Hi. Thank you so much for your kind words and support and encouragement. You really have to start from the beginning back in October. From the suggestion of another writer, I placed the previous parts at the top of my post.

But I also do the same thing when I see a series, I jump to the end, then go back. Don't know why I always want to know the ending, then see how it got there. That spoils the whole surprise. Well, I guess this comes from someone who opens gifts before Xmas because I can't stand the suspense, then rewrap them and place them back under the tree. Shameful. No wonder my family always ask, "why don't you open you gifts.?" LoL

Thanks @justclickindiva, so you're the person that can't wait and moves ahead before the surprise, good to know about that if I ever need to surprise you, stay awesome and Merry Christmas.