RE: Repertoire | The Ink Well Fast and Furious Festival - Day Four

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Hello @iamraincrystal,
You have a charming, colloquial style. This draws the reader in. You paint a colorful character in Jeffrey Cross and introduce some other curious peripheral personalities. I was looking for a resolution, a completion of the story arc. It is hinted that bad 'karma' may come from the painting. The reader wonders, is Roe's call the manifestation of that bad karma? However, you don't satisfy the reader with an ending. You don't give the reader anything to go on.

With such an amusing story it would be nice to have a conclusion, even an ambiguous conclusion. Here's a writing tip, What Is a Story Arc that might be helpful.

I did enjoy the piece though, as far as it goes.



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