Lost in the silence

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It was Jun 16th, Nirob was very happy that today was his last exam in his university life. He was also very excited. Other than that, he was a little concerned that he will enter into a bachelor's life. This is all part of life, when one chapter finishes, immediately a new chapter opens. You never know what will happen tomorrow.

He prepared hard for this exam as he didn't want to finish his exam in a dilemma that he could have done better. In his dormitory, all the students were sleeping; he could hear the tip-top noise of the dripping water coming from the washroom close to his room. About two hours ago, where he could listen to the groups of students singing near the corridor, some students were gossiping and now all pin-drop silence. All the lights off, the whole dormitory suddenly became a cremation.



Suddenly, he felt that he needed a cigarette, he searched for his cigarette packet, only one cigarette left. He didn't waste his time and started smoking. He feels so relaxed inside, all his tension has faded away. All the memories started to come one by one in his mind. He was thinking how fast the time flows, in these years, did I do something good or bad? The burning cigarette ash was almost near the filter, but he could feel the heat in his finger, he throws it started walking towards his room,

In the morning, when he woke up, he saw a bird making some rusty noise, he thought the bird was singing, looked at the bird carefully, and found something weird. He felt he should get ready with only one and a half hours left before the exam. He took a quick shower and got himself ready for going out. He went to the canteen where he had some snacks and a cup of tea. He checked his new watch, which he loved so much. The clock was striking 9:30, he started walking through the street as there was no rickshaw.



The bell ranged, and the exam started. Nirob was very happy to see the question, he was smiling. The examiner noticed that and stared at Nirob as he did something terrible. He started writing, and it took two and a half hours to write down all the questions. He quickly gave a revision and submitted the paper to the examiner. The examiner asked him why you were laughing after getting the question? Nirob replied with a smile that the question was tough.

He went to a tea shop and asked for a cigarette and a cup of tea. Suddenly, he saw his closest friend was coming towards him, he started talking to him and offered him a cup of tea. They both finished the tea, and his friend told him to go with him. Nirob also agreed to go with him.

So both started walking and then took a rickshaw. His friend told the Rickshaw driver to stop in front of the old factory. Nirob asked his friend why here? But his friend told him to follow him.

When Nirob and his friend reached, there was no one. A few moments later, a group of people with sticks, rode sharp knives and some local arms. Before Nirob could understand and try to escape from there, they started to heat him. Nirob was crying and told them to stop. There was no one to hear his voice.

His friend was watching how cruel he is! Nirob slowly became silent, there was a group of birds making noise. Nirob was thinking about the morning incident, now he understood the bird was trying to tell him something. And for the last time, he looked at his friend, then gave a smile and fell into a deep sleep.


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Good one. But couple of improvement suggestions:

  • try to slow the story line down, it’s too fast.... meaning events don’t need to happen so quickly your reader feels hurried

  • ask questions to the audience, that way they feel engaged and you feel relaxed as if you are talking to them

  • surprise is good, but there are two ways to do it, build it up, or give a jolt without any pretense, you chose the later. If that is the case then make the case even more flat

  • fix typos ;)

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Thanks, Dada, I will try to follow these suggestions. In a story tempo is very important factors. And the suspense should come with a flow. That's how the readers interact with a story or a fiction.

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Wait wait. Why they did that? Everything was going so fine suddenly that happened. Given a shock to me...

Good one bro. Expecting more to come.

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Thanks for reading and I will try to write more.

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We don’t know what will happen in our life. I feel bad reading the last part of this story...

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I felt the same way, thanks for the feedback.

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No,I don’t like this kind it dark story! Too many questions hanging in the air! It’s illogical that one moment they were good friends and next the other got killed!

Though very good prose, I prefer easily digestible stories! LoL

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Haha! I know all this question will be rolling in your mind, but this is it. Thanks for stopping by!

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